Snapshot, Show, Don't Tell

Hello readers and welcome back to my blog. We have been trying to finish this story in our class and I is finally finished. This type of writing is Show, Don't Tell. Show, Don't Tell is that you have to show your feelings and not tell them. For example: I am so scared. That is telling your feelings. You will find the showing part in the story. Hope you enjoy. 

On Tuesday, I went on a hike with my friends at Castle Hill. Castle Hill is a place

that is right next to the snowy mountains. When we went there, there was a lot

of mud and we kept slipping. It had a lot of dry and tall grass. We call them forests.

There were also a lot of little cliffs and graves. That is where we went. My friends were

off and they didn’t tell me that there were dead bodies behind me! When they started

to run I asked them “why are you running”? But they couldn’t hear me. When I looked

behind me, I SCREAMED! I started trying to sprint like a cheetah and couldn’t stop.

I couldn’t believe my eyes and had pterodactyls in my stomach. My arms were swinging

to my face then down to my pockets, my heart was beating really really fast like an

untamed, galloping and wild horse. There were a bunch of dead heads and dead bodies

walking towards me.  I felt like I wanted a gun and shoot them, I thought that day was

the end of my life. My feet were paining and trying to keep going, it felt like it needed

a good massage. I had sweat all over my body and couldn’t close my mouth. I felt like I

was in my brother’s 800 metre stadium and I had to beat him. He felt like he was going

to faint and I felt the same. My feet were covered in mud and sweat. My chest was

hurting and I thought I needed my asthma pump, I couldn’t breathe properly. I tried to

be calm and just not worry about it but I couldn’t, they were ZOMBIES! I mean how can

you not forget that you have Zombies behind you. That was the scariest day of my life.